Verbal Test - 2

Directions: The following sentence tests correctness and effectiveness of expression. Part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice (1) repeats the original phrasing; the other four choices are different. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice (1). If not, select one of the other choices.

Smashed flat by a car, I went to see what was left of my pen.

Directions: The following sentence tests correctness and effectiveness of expression. Part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice (1) repeats the original phrasing; the other four choices are different. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice (1). If not, select one of the other choices.

James longed to try the new pack of biscuits, but after coming home, he found out that they had already been eaten by the dog.

Directions: The following sentence tests correctness and effectiveness of expression. Part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice (1) repeats the original phrasing; the other four choices are different. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice (1). If not, select one of the other choices.

My brother helping his best friend cheating on a math test, but confessed the truth to the teacher immediately afterwards.

Directions: The following sentence tests correctness and effectiveness of expression. Part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice (1) repeats the original phrasing; the other four choices are different. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice (1). If not, select one of the other choices.

The response is focused, and the writer uses appropriate vocabulary and displaying a progression of ideas.

Directions: The following sentence tests correctness and effectiveness of expression. Part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice (1) repeats the original phrasing; the other four choices are different. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice (1). If not, select one of the other choices. Tony Blair along with his assistant and his press secretary, are scheduled to arrive in New York today.

Directions: The following sentence tests correctness and effectiveness of expression. Part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice (1) repeats the original phrasing; the other four choices are different. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice (1). If not, select one of the other choices.

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

The (A) principal felt (B) very sorry (C) for the candidates who (D) failed. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

He (A) need not to (B) apply for a new job (C) as he (D) will be promoted soon. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Daniel is (A) cleverest (B) of all the (C) boys in (D) the class. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) I prefer wearing white shirt (B) than the black one (C) while (D) going for formal meetings. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) He is (B) one of those who (C) reads (D) a lot of books on business management. (E) No error

Directions: The following sentence tests correctness and effectiveness of expression. Part of the sentence or the entire sentence is underlined; beneath the sentence are five ways of phrasing the underlined part. Choice (1) repeats the original phrasing; the other four choices are different. If you think the original phrasing produces a better sentence than any of the alternatives, select choice (1). If not, select one of the other choices.

Whether interacting with a friend, a roommate, a parent or the one you love, individuals expect others to be honest and feel betrayed when they are deceived.

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

He (A) commands respect (B) from his sister (C) as he is (D) elder than his sister. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) While walking (B) on the road, (C) I saw (D) an asleep man.(E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) His (B) abuses scandalized the (C) neighbours and (D) they started disliking him. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

He is a (A) hardworking man as he (B) fells all the trees (C) down (D) with an axe. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) This secret is (B) supposel to be (C) remaining (D) between the three of us. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) They had difficulty (B) climbing the stairs as they had too (C) much (D) luggages with them. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

He is such a (A) good painter (B) like (C) I have never seen (D) before. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) Hardly (B) does he (C) reach the office (D) in time. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

The teacher asked (A) the student if he (B) can explain the (C) sum to the (D) rest of the class. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

One of the (A) friend finally made up (B) his mind to start a new business in (C) partnership with (D) another friend. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) Everybody (B) like to be (C) appreciated after (D) they have worked hard on something. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

The doctor (A) forbade me (B) from smoking (C) as it is not (D) good for my health. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

She (A) denied (B) to go with her friends to a movie (C) as she (D) preferred to sit and study at home. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) He (B) has come back from (C) the tour (D) last Saturday. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) The doctor told the patient that (B) the medicine would (C) help to (D) reduce the pain.(E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) None of the (B) accounts of the company (C) have been taken into consideration (D) so far. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

He (A) bought (B) 12 dozens mangoes (C) to be distributed among (D) the poor. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

He, (A) who is (B) an employee of this office, is (C) honest (D) than wise. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) She lost the little confidence (B) which she (C) had as soon as she (D) stepped on the stage.(E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

We (A) had to finally (B) call on (C) his office to give him (D) the information. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

The boss and not (A) the employees (B) are invited (C) to attend the function (D) at a five star hotel. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Historically, the plight (A) of migrant farm workers (B) who labor in vast agricultural fields (C) of Americas southern states, (D) has been a difficult one. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) While hunting (B) in the forest we saw (C) two deers (D) running in the forest.(E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Tanisha, (A) as well as her parents (B) were expected (C) to leave (D) for Mumbai early this morning (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) All of them helped (B) one another when (C) the Tsunami destroyed (D) their home town. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) Each of the (B) girls performed (C) their best (D) in the dancing competition. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

He (A) has (B) fruits everyday (C) in the morning (D) to keep himself healthy and fit. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) In the IQ test, Sam (B) proved to be (C) most intelligent (D) than Ron. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) The teacher wanted to (B) know (C) which of the girls (D) were absent on the Sports Day. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) Have you (B) read (C) either of the six novels (D) written by J.K. Rowling? (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) In the recent times of depression, the (B) price of silver (C) as well as cotton (D) have fallen. (E) No error

Directions: The following question tests your ability to recognize grammar and usage errors. The sentence contains either a single error or no error at all. The error, if there is one, is underlined and lettered. If the sentence contains an error, select the underlined part that must be changed to make the sentence correct. If the sentence is correct, select choice (E). In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

(A) The experiments (B) of Benjamin Franklin 200 years ago (C) helped dispel superstitions and primitive ideas (D) about thunder. (E) No error

In context, which of the following is the best revision of sentence 4 (reproduced below)?
When school was ending in my sophomore year, I realized that I was going to be bow hunting that fall, and that I had better start to practice shooting.

Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answer for the question that follows. In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Bow Hunting

(1) He sighs in disappointment as he watches a bull run through the aspens. (2) He did everything he could; the bull didn't live that long by being stupid. (3) I never had that type of rush before, even though I had been defeated, I was hooked on bow hunting. (4) When school was ending in my sophomore year, I realized that I was going to be bow hunting that fall, and that I had better start to practice shooting. (5) I practiced shooting everyday. (6) I thought it wouldn't be too hard to get an elk; all I had to do was be able to hit it. (7) I started getting everything together on the day before season opened. (8) I was ready for the big day. (9) I was too excited to sleep that night so I just stayed up and read. (10) It was finally 4:30 in the morning when I jumped in the pickup and drove to where I was going to hunt. (11) It was still dark when I reached the mountain from where I wanted to glass, and waited for it to get light, so I could start looking for elk. (12) I glassed the slopes and openings but didn't see any elk.  (13) Then, I simply walked around the mountain to have a look, and when I got there, I saw some elk just moving into the aspens. (14) I thought I could get ahead of them if I cut around a hill. (15) While passing through the aspens, I heard a bull bugle just ahead of me. (16) I set up on the trail I thought he would use, checked the wind and began to call. (17) I could hear the bull moving in my direction. (18) When he was at 40 yards, he went behind some bush and I drew my bow. (19) He came into perfect sight at 30 yards and stopped broadside. (20) I was shaking so hard that I had a hard time getting my sights to hold still for the shot. (21) I put the pin right behind his shoulder and released. (22) I watched my arrow fly towards him. (23) Then I watched in horror as my arrow whizzed over his back and lodged itself into a tree behind the bull. (24) The bull hesitated a moment before he turned and ran away through the aspens. (25)I stood in disbelief and watched him run. (26) I did everything right except I was so excited that I had put the 40 yard pin on him instead of the 30 yard pin. (27) I stayed there for about five minutes and stared at where the bull had disappeared.

Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answer for the question that follows. In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Bow Hunting

(1) He sighs in disappointment as he watches a bull run through the aspens. (2) He did everything he could; the bull didn't live that long by being stupid. (3) I never had that type of rush before, even though I had been defeated, I was hooked on bow hunting. (4) When school was ending in my sophomore year, I realized that I was going to be bow hunting that fall, and that I had better start to practice shooting. (5) I practiced shooting everyday. (6) I thought it wouldn't be too hard to get an elk; all I had to do was be able to hit it. (7) I started getting everything together on the day before season opened. (8) I was ready for the big day. (9) I was too excited to sleep that night so I just stayed up and read. (10) It was finally 4:30 in the morning when I jumped in the pickup and drove to where I was going to hunt. (11) It was still dark when I reached the mountain from where I wanted to glass, and waited for it to get light, so I could start looking for elk. (12) I glassed the slopes and openings but didn't see any elk.  (13) Then, I simply walked around the mountain to have a look, and when I got there, I saw some elk just moving into the aspens. (14) I thought I could get ahead of them if I cut around a hill. (15) While passing through the aspens, I heard a bull bugle just ahead of me. (16) I set up on the trail I thought he would use, checked the wind and began to call. (17) I could hear the bull moving in my direction. (18) When he was at 40 yards, he went behind some bush and I drew my bow. (19) He came into perfect sight at 30 yards and stopped broadside. (20) I was shaking so hard that I had a hard time getting my sights to hold still for the shot. (21) I put the pin right behind his shoulder and released. (22) I watched my arrow fly towards him. (23) Then I watched in horror as my arrow whizzed over his back and lodged itself into a tree behind the bull. (24) The bull hesitated a moment before he turned and ran away through the aspens. (25)I stood in disbelief and watched him run. (26) I did everything right except I was so excited that I had put the 40 yard pin on him instead of the 30 yard pin. (27) I stayed there for about five minutes and stared at where the bull had disappeared.

Which of the following sentences is the best to add at the end of the passage?

Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answer for the question that follows. In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Bow Hunting

(1) He sighs in disappointment as he watches a bull run through the aspens. (2) He did everything he could; the bull didn't live that long by being stupid. (3) I never had that type of rush before, even though I had been defeated, I was hooked on bow hunting. (4) When school was ending in my sophomore year, I realized that I was going to be bow hunting that fall, and that I had better start to practice shooting. (5) I practiced shooting everyday. (6) I thought it wouldn't be too hard to get an elk; all I had to do was be able to hit it. (7) I started getting everything together on the day before season opened. (8) I was ready for the big day. (9) I was too excited to sleep that night so I just stayed up and read. (10) It was finally 4:30 in the morning when I jumped in the pickup and drove to where I was going to hunt. (11) It was still dark when I reached the mountain from where I wanted to glass, and waited for it to get light, so I could start looking for elk. (12) I glassed the slopes and openings but didn't see any elk.  (13) Then, I simply walked around the mountain to have a look, and when I got there, I saw some elk just moving into the aspens. (14) I thought I could get ahead of them if I cut around a hill. (15) While passing through the aspens, I heard a bull bugle just ahead of me. (16) I set up on the trail I thought he would use, checked the wind and began to call. (17) I could hear the bull moving in my direction. (18) When he was at 40 yards, he went behind some bush and I drew my bow. (19) He came into perfect sight at 30 yards and stopped broadside. (20) I was shaking so hard that I had a hard time getting my sights to hold still for the shot. (21) I put the pin right behind his shoulder and released. (22) I watched my arrow fly towards him. (23) Then I watched in horror as my arrow whizzed over his back and lodged itself into a tree behind the bull. (24) The bull hesitated a moment before he turned and ran away through the aspens. (25)I stood in disbelief and watched him run. (26) I did everything right except I was so excited that I had put the 40 yard pin on him instead of the 30 yard pin. (27) I stayed there for about five minutes and stared at where the bull had disappeared.

Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answer for the question that follows. In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Bow Hunting

(1) He sighs in disappointment as he watches a bull run through the aspens. (2) He did everything he could; the bull didn't live that long by being stupid. (3) I never had that type of rush before, even though I had been defeated, I was hooked on bow hunting. (4) When school was ending in my sophomore year, I realized that I was going to be bow hunting that fall, and that I had better start to practice shooting. (5) I practiced shooting everyday. (6) I thought it wouldn't be too hard to get an elk; all I had to do was be able to hit it. (7) I started getting everything together on the day before season opened. (8) I was ready for the big day. (9) I was too excited to sleep that night so I just stayed up and read. (10) It was finally 4:30 in the morning when I jumped in the pickup and drove to where I was going to hunt. (11) It was still dark when I reached the mountain from where I wanted to glass, and waited for it to get light, so I could start looking for elk. (12) I glassed the slopes and openings but didn't see any elk.  (13) Then, I simply walked around the mountain to have a look, and when I got there, I saw some elk just moving into the aspens. (14) I thought I could get ahead of them if I cut around a hill. (15) While passing through the aspens, I heard a bull bugle just ahead of me. (16) I set up on the trail I thought he would use, checked the wind and began to call. (17) I could hear the bull moving in my direction. (18) When he was at 40 yards, he went behind some bush and I drew my bow. (19) He came into perfect sight at 30 yards and stopped broadside. (20) I was shaking so hard that I had a hard time getting my sights to hold still for the shot. (21) I put the pin right behind his shoulder and released. (22) I watched my arrow fly towards him. (23) Then I watched in horror as my arrow whizzed over his back and lodged itself into a tree behind the bull. (24) The bull hesitated a moment before he turned and ran away through the aspens. (25)I stood in disbelief and watched him run. (26) I did everything right except I was so excited that I had put the 40 yard pin on him instead of the 30 yard pin. (27) I stayed there for about five minutes and stared at where the bull had disappeared.

Directions: The following passage is an early draft of an essay. Some parts of the passage need to be rewritten. Read the passage and select the best answer for the question that follows. In choosing the answer, follow the requirements of standard written English.

Bow Hunting

(1) He sighs in disappointment as he watches a bull run through the aspens. (2) He did everything he could; the bull didn't live that long by being stupid. (3) I never had that type of rush before, even though I had been defeated, I was hooked on bow hunting. (4) When school was ending in my sophomore year, I realized that I was going to be bow hunting that fall, and that I had better start to practice shooting. (5) I practiced shooting everyday. (6) I thought it wouldn't be too hard to get an elk; all I had to do was be able to hit it. (7) I started getting everything together on the day before season opened. (8) I was ready for the big day. (9) I was too excited to sleep that night so I just stayed up and read. (10) It was finally 4:30 in the morning when I jumped in the pickup and drove to where I was going to hunt. (11) It was still dark when I reached the mountain from where I wanted to glass, and waited for it to get light, so I could start looking for elk. (12) I glassed the slopes and openings but didn't see any elk.  (13) Then, I simply walked around the mountain to have a look, and when I got there, I saw some elk just moving into the aspens. (14) I thought I could get ahead of them if I cut around a hill. (15) While passing through the aspens, I heard a bull bugle just ahead of me. (16) I set up on the trail I thought he would use, checked the wind and began to call. (17) I could hear the bull moving in my direction. (18) When he was at 40 yards, he went behind some bush and I drew my bow. (19) He came into perfect sight at 30 yards and stopped broadside. (20) I was shaking so hard that I had a hard time getting my sights to hold still for the shot. (21) I put the pin right behind his shoulder and released. (22) I watched my arrow fly towards him. (23) Then I watched in horror as my arrow whizzed over his back and lodged itself into a tree behind the bull. (24) The bull hesitated a moment before he turned and ran away through the aspens. (25)I stood in disbelief and watched him run. (26) I did everything right except I was so excited that I had put the 40 yard pin on him instead of the 30 yard pin. (27) I stayed there for about five minutes and stared at where the bull had disappeared.