Multiple choice

Directions: This question presents a sentence, all or part of which is underlined. Beneath the sentence you will find five ways of phrasing the underlined part. The first of these repeats the original; the other four are different. If you think the original is best, choose the first answer; otherwise choose one of the others.

The night came on with its crescent moon and with its myriads of stars: just such a night as might have been wished for such a fête.

  1. The night came on with its crescent moon and with its myriads of stars: just such a night as might have been wished for such a fête.

  2. The night rose with its crescent moon and its myriads of stars: just such a night as might have been wished for such a fête.

  3. The night came on with its crescent moon and with its myriads of stars: just the kind of night as might have been wished for such a fête.

  4. The night came on with its crescent moon and its myriads of stars: just such a night as might have been wished for such a fête.

  5. None of these
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D Correct answer
Explanation

Explanation for (1): The original sentence uses ‘with’ a second time and thus has a redundancy error. 

Explanation for (2): This option uses ‘rose’ after ‘night’ which is stylistically wrong.  The ‘day can rise’ but for night the correct phrase would be ‘night came on’. 

Explanation for (3): This option is too wordy, ‘just the kind of night’ can be replaced by the single word ‘such’.
Justification for (4): This option uses the correct phrase ‘night came on’; it removes the second ‘with’ which is redundant; and uses the correct correlative ‘such’ with ‘as’.   Explanation for (5): This option uses the correct idiom ‘wished for’. However, this creates error of redundancy ‘for…for).  In this construction the word ‘wished’ can suffice for ‘wished for’.  The other ‘for’ here expresses purpose – for such a fete.

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